03/09/2009 Critique

1) 1st pan

• too much movement, shorten distance
• why do we need to have the pan?
• perhaps a static camera? showing chris putting his feet up?

2) “Feet in the air” – stay in 1st shot, then cut

3) Montage sequence – even out montage, give each item enough time

4) Huge gap in narration during Teddy cloud sequence – resolve it!

5) Wide shot with Teddy cloud

• placement of Teddy in shot is too tight
• no need for cut during jump – have Chris land in the right position and keep the wide shot

6) Kitchen scene

• DO NOT SHOW MOM’S FACE AT ALL
• “to his question” – POV on bottle, OR keep camera static (same shot), but further out
• “halt” – Chris is already in place
• camera moving along with Mom is too much
  • find 1 viewpoint and stick to it
  • can turn the camera to the right slightly, and have Mom walk into the frame
• have the Mom’s hand as a cylinder in the animatic